Friday, 13 September 2013

100 Word Challenge: Lauren

It was a fresh Saturday morning and Harvey was going fishing with his father. Once they were out on the lake Harveys father told him a rumor that there was only one fish in the lake, and that they were going to catch it.

” Fish and chips for lunch” said Harvey’s father. Two hours went by and Harvey was getting bored. Suddenly there was a tug on the line and a big pink fish jumped out of the water and into Harvey’s arms Harvey dropped the fish and his dad said “so much for Fish and Chips for our lunch!

2 comments:

  1. Lauren,
    Nice humour in your story! I enjoyed reading it. Next time they'll get their fish and chips I hope!
    Just watch some of your punctuation (especially lines 2 and 6)
    Nice write!
    Laura A, Team100

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  2. Hi Lauren
    This is a lovely 100 word challenge and I really enjoyed reading it. Your use of speech is very effective throughout the story and really adds to it. I love your final line "so much for fish and chips for lunch". It created a picture in my mind of Harvey's dad and his face when he saw that the one and only fish was gone. I also love how you started the story describing the day as a "fresh Saturday morning". Well done and keep up the good work.
    Ms O'Keeffe (Team 100wc)

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